I brought in my poem, The Mistake (original version below) to my creative writing class to get feedback, so I made some changes based on what everyone said. This is the finished product.
The Mistake
She was so beautiful
before the mistake
that wish she made
to make her "perfect".
She didn't know
how much she was loved
how truly perfect
she was in everyone's eyes.
I wish I could go back
and let her know
how I really see her
let her really know.
Now she's in that white building
getting "fixed"
but can she ever be truly fixed?
Will she ever be the same again?
I'm not really sure
but I do hope so
because I love her with all my heart
and I want things to just go back to how they were.
We all thought she knew
how dangerous that was
how pointless that was
how terrible that was.
Maybe now she will learn from her mistake;
that mistake known as an eating disorder.
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